Well, you answered all our questions, and put it in list order.... But Really? This is how you want to make your first impression? Your fine with what you wrote? You look at that and think 'Yep, thats a good reflection of my personality.'
Since your actually the old Guild Leader for Honorable Order I'm not going to make any call right now on you. But i highly suggest that if you truly care about joining our guild, you edit this post and come up with something a bit more professional. Because really... You were a guild leader... would you recruit yourself with that app?